Hi finally my poem

ihcen · Subject: Hi finally my poem Sun Feb 22, 2009 12:48 pm

Hi guys, this is my so called poem, your remarks are the most welcome:

Temptation:

A light showed up from a distance
Calmly floated, my soul it surrounded
To my ears passionate songs it whispered
Who am I to oppose?
In delight drenched was my heart
Tickled, amazed my being went up
Yes, I was dissolved into light
Who am I to oppose?
A voice echoing from eternity
Took my heart, soul, and sanity
Gathered me, called on me
“Who are you to oppose!!!”
It painfully awakened me to reality
Shook my soul, dust my brain, it hurt me
Nursed me, then the light it showed me
Yes, I am, I can, I oppose.

Rania · Number of posts: 5

Ihcen it is so beautiful. I love the melody of it.and everytime the refrain comes.You are so gifted.
Good luck I wish you all the success.

ihcen · Subject: Re: Hi finally my poem Tue Apr 07, 2009 10:16 pm

Thank you so much Rania I am happy you like it.

Val · Number of posts: 8 Job/hobbies: sport, surfing the net

Very beautiful Ihcen
I wish to read more of your poems

ihcen · Subject: Re: Hi finally my poem Mon May 18, 2009 7:43 pm

Thanks val, I wish I write more poems Razz